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Reviews For Flip

Name: krina (Signed) · Date: 04/06/11 - 05:12 pm · For: Characters
Sasaui told me not to bug you with her idea, but I'm ignoring her. She came up with the idea of Kirako being able to use his water jutsu to create a vortex that he went through and came out at one of his mirrors. I thought it was a good idea, but she wanted to stick with what you told us.

Author's Response: That's awesome! Great idea! I'm glad you told me. Tell her to go ahead. That's great. Thanks!!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/06/11 - 01:25 pm · For: Meeting
I can't help but feel sorry for Sasuke. As for what I'd do, probably the same thing Akira did. It would be cool, but sadly, it's impossible for a Naruto character to be real *sigh*. It's an awesome story and I'm glad I read it instead of just sending a random review like I'd planned. I'll read more whenever I can. Until then, I had a quick question about Kirako. Does he know any other types of jutsu besides mirror-related jutsu? Is there special things he can do with mirrors (besides how he'll be able to record what was seen through them later)?

Author's Response: Ah, well, I'll let you have free reign with that. He's from the hidden rain, so it'd make sense for him to have water-related jutsu, but I'll leave it up to you.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 30/05/11 - 01:37 pm · For: Dinner
Brilliant. This was... just amazing.

Now, I can already imagine some other people reading this chapter and thinking it boring, especially since the last chapter had some action with Sasuke pushing that girl into a pool. That was funny. This chapter was more serious.

And it was still brilliant. Wanna know why? You had great insight into Takumi's life. This is the kind of thing I had imagined when I posted the 'Let's Be Original' challenge. It wasn't a requirement, but I wanted to see the problems of the real world characters and how the Naruto character would deal with those types of things. The entire chapter consisted of this. Takumi's family life along with Sasuke's witnessing it, it blended so well, and I loved every minute of it, honestly.

Great work, I really loved this chapter. Real world problems with a Naruto character viewing it all. Excellent! Good job well done.

This crossover you're thinking about sounds really good. Kind of violent, but it still sounds like a good idea. I think it would make more sense to do the Hidden Mist exams, where they fight to become a genin (or I think that's what the exams were for...?). And a joint story as well? Cool! I would like to see that *hint hint*

Anyways, keep up the good work with your stories, they're all going great!

Author's Response: Awesome! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the compliments.rnrnI haven't really decided much about the crossover, but the Hidden Mist exams are as good a start as any. Thanks again!! You're awesome!! :D


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 28/05/11 - 07:38 pm · For: Morita Family
Dang, has Sasuke met his match in Takumi's father in the glare contest? I think so.

I know it was morally wrong in the real world to have violence, but I laughed so hard when Sasuke instinctly punched that girl. She had it coming. And the small intro to the family was interesting, quite the family scene you had there... until dinnertime came and the parents spooked me out a bit.

Great job! You have really found your way again with this story. I cannot wait for more. Nice work on this!

Author's Response: Awesome! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/05/11 - 07:27 pm · For: Boxers?
Haha, I like how Sasuke was considering killing them. Now that is in character for him. You were also sharing some info on the characters. The whole money thing actualy reveals a lot about the characters, so good job.

Now, at least Sasuke has agreed to cooperate... for now, at least. I can't wait to see how he adjusts to the real world.

Great job! I look forward to any future comedy that may come with Sasuke's adjustment to the modern world. And anything else you post, I know will be awesome! Keep up the excellent work!

Author's Response: Yeah, I'll try my best. Thanks!!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/05/11 - 09:32 am · For: Characters
First off, the characters sound interesting. I think the idea of changing how it usually is is interesting (which is why I done the challenge, too). I'll try to read it when I get the chance. Oh, and by the way I wanted to let you know that you can change your ocs rank. The start of the story has changed a bit.

Author's Response: Alright... I want my OC to be a chunin now. Thanks for letting me know.


Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 23/05/11 - 05:35 pm · For: I just have some questions for my readers...
I think Sasuke should be really pretty evil, but he could influence a OC, especially if one is doing illegal stuff...(hint hint)

This should be during Shippuden, before he kills Orochimaru. That way, Kakashi would have a reason to capture him.

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I think it should be hinata, it adds drama, and we could see how much Sasuke leaving affected Naruto, because Hinata would know that. After Hyuggas, i think Uzumaki, Ino's clan, and Kiba's. Then, definitely Kakashi's, go Hatakes!

Author's Response: Haha, okay thanks. I'll probably stick with Silverwolf's idea about post-war time, but thanks. I agree. It'll probably just be Hinata. Thank you!!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 23/05/11 - 04:44 pm · For: I just have some questions for my readers...
Yeah, I can't really come up with any way to show option 1 without it being boring. It would just seem like a let down after the awesome previous chapter. So I would say go for option 2, where Takumi and Kenji return to find that everyone else has completed their chores, and then they can all continue.

I think it would be a good idea for Sasuke to be from the post-shippuden era. Maybe not too far into the future, since he should be high school in the real world. So actually, maybe the later days in shippuden, like how it is currently or maybe after the war. He would probably be around 17 when the war ends, so that seems like a good age.

On a scale of 1-10, Sasuke should be about an 8. And he should honestly be shown his evil side. But, since he is in a different world, someone should put him into his place. The crew obviously have to teach him how to behave in their world, so he'll need to listen to them. Of course, Sasuke won't like it, and you should definitely show his stubborn full-of-too-much-pride attitude. But obviously, he'll befriend the crew eventually.

Personally, I find it unstable when the writer switches points of view with the change of chapters. And since you have gone this far with third person, I say stick to it. And if you're comfortable writing in third person, stick to what you know. And it actually shows the skill of the writer when he/she portrays the thoughts of the characters through third person. So I know you'll be able to handle that ;)

For your other story, I think Sasuke seeing just Hinata would be fine. But if you want, you can just throw some random Hyuuga members around who give Sasuke dirty looks and such. If you do add a significant amound of Hyuugas, just add a couple who happen to be Hinata's advisors, but that's really all you would need.

Since you have already thrown Kiba into the story, I guess there is no need to reference the Inuzuka clan. I cannot really tell you which clans you should write about. But whatever ideas your mind comes up with, use them and write them down. And if you can't think of an idea for a clan, such as the Nara or Akimichi or whoever, just skip the clan and bring the character in some other time, where it would be more comfortable for you as the writer and more interesting for the reader.

I hope my review has helped to stimulate your brain cells. Don't worry about blanking on some of these plot points, it happens to everyone. I know that you'll pull through. Good luck!

Author's Response: Thanks! That was great advice! I gave me some more ideas and now I can quit thinking so hard on what to do. Yeah, I think it would be better and more interesting if I just leave it to where Takumi and Kenji return. rnI'll throw in some characters in later chapters like you suggested. Thanks a lot!! Really!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/11 - 12:30 pm · For: Illegal Stuff
Haha, wow, that was crazy. Very creative, I loved it. And yay for the speedy update, literally two seconds after I reviewed. Wow, I really love this story, it is so entertaining. Of course, all of that illegal stuff just makes it funnier! Great job, I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Yes, illegal is fun to write, haha. Thanks for the review and compliment on my story.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/11 - 12:07 pm · For: Takumi Takes Charge
Haha, nice work with Sasuke. No more OOCness, yay! He was very in character. And when he used his Sharingan, he scared everyone so much, it was hilarious. Ah, Kenji and his high school crush, that's adorable. Yeah, anyways, good job with this chapter! I really like it now that Sasuke's life is pretty much being organized by a bunch of high school kids and an ice cream shop owner. Haha, poor poor Sasuke. Update soon please, this is really good!

Author's Response: Thanks! I just finished another chapter too!


Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 20/05/11 - 02:10 pm · For: Meeting
Great work on this. I really mean it. Love how Sasuke is all confused. Great. Just great. Please update this soon! GO KAKASHI AND SASUKE-San! (as characters, not a couple. I don't do yaoi)

Author's Response: Thanks! And yeah, I don't do yaoi either.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 20/05/11 - 03:40 am · For: Meeting
Haha, I like how they just laughed in his face when he said his name. I bet Sasuke has never had anyone laugh in his face other than Naruto. But just make sure to not make Sasuke too easily pushed around. With these guys laughing at him, I feel like he would do more than stand there. Make him give the famous Uchiha glare at least, that would convince them that he is Sasuke :D But I really like the setup for the characters, showing their relationship very well. You have created a good group of characters, and I look forward to reading how they will react with Sasuke when they find out who he actually is. This is really good, I can't wait to read more! Keep up the great work with this story!

Author's Response: Oh yeah, thanks for the advice. Thank you.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/05/11 - 03:47 am · For: Characters
Oh, nice characters. I am very excited for this story because you never ever see a Naruto character go to the real world. This should be fun, especially the Sasuke fan girl part. Can't wait for that XD Actually, I made a challenge that asks the readers to send a Naruto character into the real world. Check it out, it's called 'Let's Be Original'. You can submit this for the challenge. Anyways, I can't wait to read this! I hope you put chapter one up soon!

Author's Response: Hm, forgot to respond, eh? Well, thanks for reviewing, but I probably won't work on this story much... I'm bored of it. Updates will be slow


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