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Reviews For Freshman Year

Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 05/06/11 - 01:58 pm · For: To The Mall!

I like that Sakura and Ino are slowly becoming friendly towards each other that is so cute considering they were friends back in the day, so it really cute.

And thank your understanding that knowing fashion and dressing up for an event such as an outing to the mall is a completely girl like thing. I was kind of getting tired of seeing girls who didn’t care about dressing up but still look and then claiming they are different but I have seen the same girl about a hundred thousand times you’re not that different so good job on switching up a bit.

Oh you kept some of his Kyuubi traits before you explain why in later chapters or you will have a giant plot hole in the story. It’s not important now but if events like this keeping happening then an explanation is defiantly worthy. (Sorry if I sound mean at all >< in any of the reviews I give you).

The boys seem like gossiping girls; even the Naruto men have a feminine side.

Yep the Uchiha’s are the police force in Konoha so good job with that, I wonder what role Itachi plays. And I really can’t wait for the party ^O^.

Besides all that Shierra, is so cute worrying about an unsupervised party.

But I really enjoyed the fight scene between Lee and Gaara (You kept him in character). It happened in the Manga why not in AU world right.



Author's Response: Yup, I can't not make Sakura and Ino friends, it just seemed like the right thing to do. Okay, so about these girly things.... I like to say I'm different, but I mean really, I'm still a girl, and for an outing to the mall and trying to catch a boy's eye, a girl should definitely get dolled up. In my opinion anyway. Hmm, I'll definitely keep that in mind about the Kyuubi traits, thanks for warning me. And about the guys.... well, I tend to think some guys are worse than girls when it comes to gossiping. My guy friends are perfect examples, but that's an entirely different topic ;D Haha, I also cannot wait for the party! And yeah, I thought the fight scene would be interesting between Lee and Gaara. Glad to know I kept him in character as well. And no, your reviews have not been mean at all! I really appreciate everything you have to say. Thank you so much for sharing all of your thoughts with me. You're an awesome reviewer!


Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 05/06/11 - 11:49 am · For: The Showdown

Sasuke seemed in character in this chapter, I meaning not showing an ounce of concern though he is worried and how he stayed emotionless even with Zuko holding him.

And I really enjoyed Naruto’s personality on this he is the kind of guy that sticks up for his friends even they aren’t there, him lecturing Ino is very Naruto. Not only that angry Naruto is kind of cute don’ you think good gob describing him.

As for Ino, poor Ino but don’t forget Sakura worked the same way she broke her friendship with Ino because she saw Ino as rival this is just a reminder. Other than that I really like how Ino is developing.

Yea, you didn’t make Naruto have his phone magically in his hand. He forgot to charge it so of course it will be missing when he needs it the most…I wonder why I didn’t catch that.

OMG I just realized something you’re basing this story off of the second ending for Naruto shippuden. O.o that’s pretty clever. I’ve always wanted to read a fanfic based on that little ending the fact that you did it is pretty cool. ^^

This is by far the best chapter. I like Shierra is this chapter too, she sort of wraps up the whole fight scene pretty nicely doesn’t she.

 



Author's Response: Yes! I got Sasuke in character. Time for a celebration! I loved writing about Naruto in this chapter, it honestly just made me love him more. Haha, angry Naruto is definitely cute, I will have to agree with you ;D Hmm, that is true about Sakura. I should have remembered that, darn. But I'm glad you still like how Ino is developing. Haha, you're the first to comment on the phone thing. Yeah, see? All things are connected in a way, I don't make this stuff up as I go along.... most of the time. YAY! You are the first person to catch the similarity! Yeah, I saw that ending for Naruto Shippuden, and I fell in love. I thought it would make a pretty good intro arc for a high school fic, so I used it. Ah, Shierra does wrap things up rather nicely. Thanks for noticing. Thank you again for reading this. You're a very observant reader and a very insightful reviewer. Thank you a lot for all of your comments! You're amazing!


Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 05/06/11 - 09:36 am · For: Lightning Strikes When You Least Expect It

Whoa!! I like it Lighting bull taking the girls I was surprised but what really surprised when Ino told Naruto excellent. I knew you had it in you to step out of that card board cut out slut people always go for Woot but this chapter was pretty shocking and most of the characters were in fact in character good job



Author's Response: Haha, see? I told you that you would have to read the next couple chapters. Oh gosh, wait until you get to the next chapter ;D I am very excited that you liked this. It took you by surprise, which is exactly what I was aiming for. And there was no OOCness? Hurray! I'm glad that you enjoyed this. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! You're awesome!


Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 04/06/11 - 11:04 pm · For: Halfway There...

Wow good chapter Naruto getting trouble on the first day is so him, I love it. Of course Sasuke was in character considering he is a hard character. Though him being scared of Ino seems off, he’ll probably scare her off like he does with Sakura.

Careful with Ino I mean it’s nice to have the classical villain slut but give her more of a three dimension feel to her. Make her different then what everybody else has in their story. I know you can do it, you more creative than half the people on FF.Net.

Other then that I liked how you brought each character out and how they reacted with each other.



Author's Response: Haha, yeah, Naruto can't seem to go a day without getting in trouble. Yeah, after I wrote about Sasuke being afraid of Ino, I instantly knew I was wrong. But I kept it because I thought it would add some sort of humor. Bah, OOCness only makes it worse! And about Ino.... eh, I'll just wait for you to read the next couple chapters. I do give her more depth in the following chapters, so don't worry. But I'm really happy to hear that you think I'm that creative. Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked this chapter. Thanks so much for still reading and thanks a bunch for still reviewing! Your advice makes my day!


Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 20/05/11 - 03:13 am · For: Enter! The Incoming Freshmen!

I really like how you brought in each character. Naruto screaming randomly who he is and how great he is so Naruto –roll’s eyes-. Of course Naruto and Sasuke’s fights are always fun to read.

Aw~ Naruto has a crush on Shierra that’s so cute. I can’t wait to read more.

Oh yeah Shierra seems realistic, I mean working on school to keep her grades I like that a lot ^^.



Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked the intro to the characters, that was fun for me to write as well. And of course, Naruto... well, we all know how he can get. Naruto and Sasuke are always arguing about something, so I have to make sure to get those right. Haha, Naruto's crush on Shierra seemed like a fun thing to write about, so we'll see where that goes. I'm also glad to hear that you think Shierra is realistic. I figure someone in the group has to be dedicated to school grades, so I made it her. I'm glad to hear you like that :D Thank you so much for reading this and thank you even more for reviewing. I really appreciate your feedback!


Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 16/05/11 - 04:24 pm · For: Heading Out to High School
I like that Gato, he was in the beginning of Naruto series. That was clever keeping the original villain Masashi Kishimoto had put in very thought out.  I like that =) a lot. And the best part is Gato was originally a drug dealer =). Other then that I think you got most of the characters in characters. I could all the Naruto characters reaction upon getting the text. Hinata never planning on doing anything because she is quiet, Sai and Sasuke not caring, Sakura though I hate her, I think you did a good job not bashing on her. As for Shino, I think he would be one that wasn’t planning anything but we can’t have too many Sai and Sasuke now can we so I’m getting were you are going at (so it’s alright and besides you didn’t ooc him =]). Zuka I think is off but I haven’t watched the Anime in forever so who am I to judge ;). Aw~ poor Naruto but very in character of him, forgetting to charge his phone. Thinking he’ll be the next big. I was snickering at his part and thinking of all the trouble he will get himself into. I really can’t wait to see what happens when he gets to school. Any way good job for an AU story usual they are bit difficult because you are rolling with their personality but not a very stable back story I think you did a good job =)  

Author's Response: Oh, thank you for noticing Gato. You're the first one to comment on that :) I'm glad I got most of the characters in character. The text was very fun to think of, honestly. And now that I think about it, you're right about Shino. But I was going for the part of him that gets fed up with being unnoticed, so he would want to stand out in some way. I'm trying to portray Zuko as the older brother tye, and it is kinda hard... Oh, poor poor Naruto... I am so cruel to our favorite blonde. Hmm, unstable back story. I'll go back and work on that, thanks for saying something about that. Thanks for the supporting review, though! I really appreciate you reading a bunch of my stories. Thank you so much for reading this and thanks even more for reviewing! You're an awesome reader/reviewer!


Name: MIngWei (Signed) · Date: 28/01/11 - 02:15 pm · For: To The Mall!
I WANT NARUTO AND HINATA TO GET TOGETHER!!!! Thanks for updating! Great way to start my weekend ^_^ I kinda feel bad for Lee, but at the same time I couldn't help but laugh at the line "my dignity has been squashed and stepped on". It's cute and heartbreaking at the same time :) MORE PLEASE! :D

Author's Response: Haha, I know right! It might take a while, but hopefully Naruto will realize he belongs with Hinata. I'm glad that I have given you a good start to your weekend. Updating this chapter honestly made mine as well because I love adding new chapters! And Lee is so adorable with his pride... I felt a little bad making him lose, but it's to help the story. I'm so sorry, Lee!!! Hopefully I'll get the next chapter out soon. Thanks for reading and being such a faithful fan to this story! It really means a lot! You're awesome for reviewing every chapter!


Name: SandShinobi21 (Signed) · Date: 27/01/11 - 11:17 pm · For: To The Mall!
COOL!! This is just as great as your pirates story! And man chapter 5 was the best damn fight scene ever! Naruto is forever my favorite! Thank you for writing this! :)
(ps. Bringing Zuko in was awesome! lol ATLA is still one of the best shows ever!)

Author's Response: Whoo! I'm super glad that you decided to read this story as well! And to hear that you think it's as good as Pirates of the Mist is a real confidence booster. And I'm glad that the fight scene was written well, considering I have issues with writing fights. Naruto is purely awesome, and I have to write him as such. And Zuko is incredible, and I love him in Avatar! I love Avatar in general! Thanks for choosing to read this story as well, and thanks a bunch for reviewing it! You're an awesome fan!


Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 27/01/11 - 05:44 am · For: To The Mall!
Yea an update! OK me and my friend love to watch Naruto, then critique all their outfits and say how we could make them better. You read my mind on Hinata. Love the new look! Yay and you included Kankuro, Temari, and evil Gaara in this fanfic! That is so awesome (mainly because i love those characters so much) Please update soon! Great job!

Author's Response: Woohoo! I'm super glad that you liked this chapter! And I'm happy that I portrayed Hinata's new look well. I figured Ino would be the fashionista and make Hinata look awesome. rnAnd I totally got the idea to put the sand siblings in there at the last minute. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter! Thank you so much for reading and thanks a bunch for reviewing!


Name: MIngWei (Signed) · Date: 09/01/11 - 12:07 pm · For: The Showdown
YAY! I loved this chapter :D I loved your last sentence too, great way to end that. And don't worry about taking up so many chapters for one day; if it's interesting then it shouldn't matter. And it's definitely interesting :D I loved how Sakura stomped on the guy and even asked if Hinata wanted to do something too. And I loved your line with Lee cheering about the power of youth defeating evil; it's very Lee-like XD
I can't wait to see what else you have planned for this story! ^_^

Author's Response: Hurray! I'm excited that you loved this chapter. I smiled when I wrote that last sentence, just because it seemed so fitting. I'm glad you think that I didn't take up too much time for one day. It was the first day of high school, so I figured it would take up some time. But I'm happy to hear that my story is so interesting to you. Yup, Sakura is definitely the type to step on someone. And I just had to put in a line about Lee and the power of youth! I can't write about him and not put a reference like that ;D I'll try to update soon. Thanks for your support by reading and reviewing this story!


Name: MIngWei (Signed) · Date: 09/01/11 - 11:40 am · For: Lightning Strikes When You Least Expect It
OMG! for some reason I didn't see an email update about this story, and when I logged on here I happened to see you had TWO chapters already up!! AHHH!! I felt a little guilty especially since you made a shout out to me ^_^
I'm really really really loving this story. I can't wait to read the next chapter to see what happens (which will happen shortly in a few minutes :D) Hmm, I wonder if Ino will become friends with everyone. I kinda hope so, I don't think she's too bad of a person :)
Good job, keep it up please :D

Author's Response: Haha, I was wondering where you were! Yup, I updated two chapters over my winter break. I'm super glad that you continue to enjoy my story. I feel honored every time you review this story. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 01/01/11 - 11:36 am · For: Heading Out to High School
Overall good story. I normally don't read highschool fanfics (i dont know why...i guess the idea doesn't really intrigue me..) but this one ties character relations and personalities together very well. You took the same personalities from the anime/manga, and then added you're own flare to them. Now that you have gotten rid of the bully, i have yet to wonder what new challenges you will throw at them (though hopefully not the biggest challenge...algebra!) I smiled when I read that you included Sirious and Zuko, mainly because it was like you read my mind. (I love those two characters so much in their book and show. Thank you though for not following their exact personalities. I think overall you did a nice job coming up with new names. (mainly because i think it is almost impossible to come up with original names...) One last comment, thank you so much for having one main character like school. (Power to the Nerds!) All things considered you did a great job on this story, considering it takes place in an unfamiliar territory. Keep up the great work! =)

Author's Response: Wow, considering you don't normally read high school fics, I am truly honored that you chose to read mine. And I'm super flattered that it actually caught your eye! As for challenges, I have 179 more days to throw at them, so we'll just have to see. Although, that algebra thing might be a good idea ;) Sirius and Zuko are so amazing, I just had to include them! But since I think it would be hard to follow their personalities, I changed them around a bit. I have so much trouble with names. I'm just not that creative when it comes to making new names. Also, I just HAD to put in a character who likes school. I consider myself a nerd, so I needed someone like that in this story. Thanks so much for the positive review. And thanks a bunch for all the support you show my stories! You're awesome! Thanks again for reading and reviewing :D


Name: DonniiE (Signed) · Date: 31/12/10 - 09:26 pm · For: The Showdown
This story is just awesome! (:
I especially liked this chapter because I thought that you wrote it out very nicely. I liked the part with Sakura stomping on that Nadare's face. XD
And I guess Ino's their friend now, huh? I wonder how that will end up like. :p

I really like your story! Hope you update soon.

Author's Response: Yay! I love it when my story gets a new fan. I'm super glad that you enjoyed this chapter. It took a really long time to write this chapter, so I'm glad you appreciated the effort I put into it. Yeah, Sakura can be pretty mean when she wants to be... and scary too... Yeah, Ino will be considered a friend...we'll just have to wait to see how that works out. Thanks so much for reading, and thanks a ton for reviewing! It makes my day when my readers share their thoughts with me. Happy New Year!


Name: BloodyWolfFangs (Signed) · Date: 27/12/10 - 04:50 pm · For: Heading Out to High School
Is this story Naruto, Harry Potter, or Avatar. Very unoriginal on the names and description of Sirius and Zuko...good start though! I'll definately read more!

Author's Response: No, it's Naruto. I'm sorry! I'm terrible with names! But the idea is mine, which should count for something, right? I hope you enjoy reading this story anyways! Thanks for the review!


Name: MIngWei (Signed) · Date: 25/12/10 - 03:00 pm · For: Halfway There...
Hahaha poor Naruto; I wonder what'll happen to him in detention XD I like how you're able to keep Sasuke in character, cuz I tend to have that problem a lot. And it's good that you can do that cuz then you can show the relationship between Naruto and Sasuke quite accurately. You're doing really well; keep it up! I really want to keep reading :D

Author's Response: Oh yes, detention with Tsunade; can't you just imagine it? I'm glad you think that I keep Sasuke in character. Whenever I write about him, I feel like I'm making him super OOC. But I'm happy to hear that I do a good job of writing him. I also love writing Naruto and Sasuke moments. They balance each other so well. Thanks for your words of praise. They really mean a lot. I'm glad that this story has interested you so much. Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays!


Name: MIngWei (Signed) · Date: 11/12/10 - 08:29 pm · For: Enter! The Incoming Freshmen!
HAHAHA omg I loved this chapter! Ok, first...the title. LOVE. And second...the names, hehe...I'm pretty sure Nuka is the name of one of the lions in Lion King 2 XD and isn't Zabini the last name of someone in Harry Potter (is it REALLY REALLY weird that I'm able to make these connections?? god, i'm a freak). And of course, Sokka XD

Ok, anyway. My jaw literally dropped when I read what Naruto said when he first got to the school. omg, he is just ASKING for trouble, haha

"Because you're my forver girl"...wow, haha. Nice.

Please keep this going (especially since you decided to leave it on a cliffhanger XP); I loved reading this

Author's Response: Girl, I told you! I'm terrible at making names! Yes, Nuka is the name of Kovu's brother in Lion King 2. Zabini is Blaise Zabini, Draco Malfoy's best friend. Wow...I need to be more creative... No, it's not weird that you can make connections. It only means that I'm not being discreet enough... Haha, glad you liked my interpretation of Naruto. I love writing him. It just makes me smile :) Muahahahahaha for cliffhangers! But don't worry; I'll try to update as soon as possible.


Name: MIngWei (Signed) · Date: 06/12/10 - 12:00 pm · For: Heading Out to High School
I figured since you've been reviewing a lot of my stories I should return the favor :) I really, really, really like this story so far. I've wanted to do a sort of AU/High School sort of thing, but when I actually tried it...well, it was pretty much crash and burn. Reading this though made me want to try again ^_^
The characters made me think of Avatar (Zuko) and Harry Potter (Sirius), just cuz of the names...is that weird of me? haha.
I really liked reading how everyone reacted when they got the text about being invisible, and especially the end with Naruto; poor guy XD I can't wait to read the next chapter and find out what happens to him :)

Author's Response: Aw, you're so nice to review my stories! And I will admit that I wasn't original with names. Zuko's appearance is the same, cuz I mean, Zuko is totally hot with his scar ;) Sirius wasn't based on Harry Potter, I just like the name :) But I promise that the personalities will most likely not reflect the characters from the Avatar and Harry Potter. I enjoyed writing the different people in there and their reactions to the text. I thought it was a different approach to high school! Anyway, I think you should try to an AU/High School fic because you're a great writer, and I'm sure you can make it work out. I have confidence in you. And thanks again for reviewing! I love support!


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